Published January 24, 2008
these are a couple of poems i wrote that both go by the name of "Willie the Goldfish".
here's the limerick version:
There once a goldfish named Will-ie
Who was as big as he could be,
He'd go out at night
And take a bite
Out of fishers on the sea.
and here's the short song version (sung to a similar tune as the first line of "Frosty the Snowman"):
Willie the Goldfish
Was as big as he could be,
He'd go out at night and take a bite,
Out of fishers on the sea.
lol! i just messed around and made this up......
Teh Wozzinator
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haha, great comment!
lolol...
hey, here's a really weird and stupid haiku... that rhymes!
lol
Haiku de Chip
Why would you want those,
When you get Ranch Doritos,
And/or corn Fritos????
XDXDXD soooooo....stupid!! lol!!
Teh Wozzinator
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Haha, very cute! I don't think you need the - in Willie in the limerick, and I'd also suggest saying something like "And take a big bite" to make it flow a little better. Also, perhaps fishermen rather than fishers. In the second one, I think the length of the third line makes the rhythm a little off, so I prefer the limerick version. Again, very cute, Wozzinator!
haha, it wasn't really made for teens, and it was more for a little kids type theme. but i thought i'd post it anyways since it's one of the few poems i've wrote.
Teh Wozzinator
I kinda had fun reading it. Sounded like a classic children's ditty.
I have no fish, let alone a goldfish named Willie, it's all made up.
The second was created first, when I made up something to go with the tune because my sister was walking around humming "Frosty the Snowman", so I made up something similar when I got the tune stuck in my head. But the tune's a little bit different.
lol!
Teh Wozzinator
I think it's cute. I like how it rhymes. I like the first one better than the second. It has a better feel to it. Do you really have a goldfish named Willie, or is it just your imagination?